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Most of the time I read your stories in french version. You are very talented. With you, we travel to Japon from USA and in Italy.
Which of your stories do I like best ? Hard to tell.
The "white and black", with the Pianist who fall in love for a black cop: wonderful.
Then, most of the little stories about sommer love in "Beach Tales" and particulary with Gino and Dario... and also the one at the end of the sommer when two men stay with their desire find that they can have fun and more toghether, the one with the friends in the vestiaire and the other with friends who pass their exams ... almost all of thoses stories where pretty good.
Alberto and Stefano the mecano and the student... delicious,
You can write and describe feelings so corectly that I just cant stop reading. I still waiting for the last part of the aventure of "Mar Swooney" or must I say of his Son.
You have so fabulous stories that, I'll certainly forget some of them even if they are not less interesting.
Which one I dislike ? It's was a too sad one :the "Dinosaures are hard to die". Two students in english school and one have been betrayed by his brother and comited suicide... this one was not funny... but correctly write.
I think that you're very talented. I have almost forget to tell you about "The Tide Man" the one of a japanese student who fall in love for a fisherman was ..... a Super great one.
I just think that you could write more stories whith two mature men ( 30 why not 40. ) I dont know why is always two yongs men or a yong and mature even in movies. Men are also very sexy and they dont needs to pair every time with a young boy.
Ok. I leave the master return to his masterpieces.
Thank again.
Alvin
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Thursday, 11 March 2010 |
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Hello.
I never thought I could send you a note.
I used to read some of youre novels "in french". They are most of the time pretty good And among all, the graetest was among "The Beach Tales" so nice with deep feeling sometimes.
I'm not writing this to tell you how good you're , I think that you already knew it.
I was just wondering Why, you wanna do as Mar Swooney's: Vokka, and give up a job that was obviously in a good way.... my comparaison is not so good Vokka did'nt find that his father job was in good way. Hi hihihi.
The novel of "Mars Swonney" is really a good job.
I dont like all the prt on it , but certains part was "Fantastique"
The change that the burglar make for the love was so lovely, the loyalty of Moder my favorite character,( before Vokka and the Kresthian friend of Mars,) was a great time of the book.
The way you describe the burial of Tova is pretty similar with the way in a certain part of africa I know, twins funeral ceremonies going on... and even if it's was a gay heros...the best love stories was hetero... I wonder why? In a certain way, gay autor who's describing gay life style as the only and the best are not always among my favorites. But I really find that hetero love stories you describing are more with feelings that most of gay one which most of the time are purely sexual.
Just a point of view
anyway a so great job deserve his end.
With my respect and my consideration
A french reader... To excuse my chaotic english
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Friday, 06 April 2007 |
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Critique? OK, here goes. As a writer, I think I'm in a special position to give one. ;)
I read Beach tales, and I feel like your main aim in these stories is to cram in as much mansex as possible rather than to write the best possible story. My first suggestion to you is to slow down and let the story follow a more natural pace.
Another thing is that there never seems to be straight people, shy people, people who need time to warm up to others, or people who just don't feel in the mood in your stories. It's like "Hey, I just met you six seconds ago, want to fuck?" "Okay!" Not everyone is ready to drop 'em and insert tab A into slot B on a moment's notice, or even think that a man's anus is a good place to put "tab A". Even if you take the (somewhat optimistic) figure of 10% of the population being homosexual, that still leaves 9 out of 10 men preferring pussy over cock. Your characters should actually meet people who aren't interested.
I think you show considerable potential as a writer, but you need to work more on developing a coherent story rather than cramming the maximum amount of beat-off material per page. Writing is not a porn movie - it's OK to take your time and let the money shot wait for later.
(unsigned message, and not existing e-mail address... of course!)
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