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Hello Andrej,
I've read "The Life Wheel" . A comments on your English language use. Personally, I think it is a little formal, but the touch of formality is perfect for the story thus far. It seems to help define the main character, Matteo, as a person with "a duty" and the formality of calling him Professor is natural to the setting, Italy. He is a person of warmth, sexual attraction but with a clear sense of the behavior most conducive to being a successful teacher. He may have feelings of attraction for at least one of is students, but at this time feels that acting on that attraction would diminish his ability to intereact with all the students.
I can see that your style is quite different from many of the writers at Nifty. I enjoy reading some "Nifty Stories'; at the same time I enjoy classical and very modern 'experimental' fiction and non-fiction. My main purpose is to encourage you to maintain the tone you have set thus far, at least for this story.
I've not read any of your other work. When I have the opportunity, I will look at your Web site.
Good wishes and warm regards from Thailand.
Tu
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